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[Dan Knight]

Hi

I was trying out a new digital inking technique, and decided to create a picture of Susan to practice with.

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Original Susan Picture

Criticisms please. I want to improve.

I'll be practicing more as well - I will probably do the entire cast while I'm still locking down this technique.

UPDATE: I took the comments, and did a redux version. Here it is:

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Again, critques welcomed.

[Youwillneverknow]

I like the blue you chose

the arms look a little thin and the foot are pointed, but other then that I don't see any problems with your art, I like it

[Pippi]

The inking technique looks like it works fantastically! And while that is a great pic, I think she looks a little old to be Susan. Perhaps I'm just so used to Dan's (Shive, not Knight) softer style, but this woman looks to be at least in her late twenties, to me.

But still, well drawn.

[Dan Knight]

Thanks, both of you. Now you've pointed out the mistakes, I can see how to fix them.

Yes, she does look a bit old. That wasn't intentional. I think it's because her head is too small in relation to her body. Should probably be bigger. And the shoes...I had a hell of a time trying to get them looking like actual pointed lady's shoes.

I'm probably going to draw a redux version fixing the issues mentioned. Then when that's done, and I'm happy with my new style, I'll do the rest of the cast to practice. But first, Fallout 3!

[Dame HelenNet]

This thread has been attac...er, VISITED by the BunnyCast during episode 44!

MWA-HAHAHAHA!!!!

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Nicely done art, btw.

[Dan Knight]

Really? This thread doesn't seem to be important enough. I only have one picture so far. May I have the link to that episode? I can't find it on the bunnycast page.

[Lyre Harper]

Really? This thread doesn't seem to be important enough. I only have one picture so far. May I have the link to that episode? I can't find it on the bunnycast page.

It's not up yet. *hounds HNet until it is*

[Dan Knight]

Okay, here's the redux version of Susan:

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Again, critiques would be appreciated. I've updated the first post as well. Gonna use it as kind of an index of my images.

[Youwillneverknow]

well I preferred the colours on your first attempt, these one seem a little faded

again very well drawn

[Dan Knight]

Thanks. They're the same colours as last time. I think it's the green background, and the slightly less prominent outlines that contribute to the faded look. Might have gone a bit overboard on the shading as well. Still practicing though, hopefully I'll get it right soon.

Next up: Justin!

[Pippi]

You have a very confident line, Dan, and a good sense of color. I like the way you handled her hair too! She looks much younger in the second pic, and I think the larger head size goes a long way towards helping with that particular difficulty.

Some things to consider, possibly:

Her clavicles are riding pretty low there. Collar bones tend to dip a bit as they pull away from the shoulder, but these put the head of her sternum about halfway down her chest. This in turn adds to making her torso seem overly long, and kind of makes her bosoms seem a bit awkward, IMO.

Her neck is a little on the thin side, as well, and this is something that is exacerbated by the placement of her clavicles, because the sternomastoids have a long way to travel with those low collar bones.

Her eyes seem a bit close-set as well (although I really like the way you've drawn them!). I guess her whole face seems a little bit crowded as it is.

Lastly, a lot of artists tend to give their subjects too little of a skull when they start out drawing humans, but you seem to have pushed a little bit in the other direction, with her cranium seeming a bit over-sized. Her face adds a bit to this impression with her features so close set, as well.

All in all, this is a good picture, and you're doing a great job of changing as you spot stuff as you go. The goofy list above is just a few more things you might want to consider as you continue on your way.

I'm really looking forward to seeing your Justin pic! Thanks for sharing your stuff with us!

[Dan Knight]

Thanks for all those comments. They're exactly what I'm looking for. I'll keep them in mind whilst drawing Justin.

[Celtic Minstrel]

The first thing I noticed was that her face looks wrong somehow. I'd attempt to figure out why, but I suspect Pippi has done a better job than I could.

[Dan Knight]

Sorry it's taking so long to draw Justin. This week is exam week, so I'm not properly free until after the exam on Friday. Expect the picture sometime Saturday or Sunday.

[Youwillneverknow]

For your art I will wait until the stars turn cold

[Dan Knight]

Well, here's what I've done so far. Still a work in progress, obviously.

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[Youwillneverknow]

Justin has a promising facial expression, I like what I see and wait for the colours with excitement

[Dan Knight]

Bleh. This didn't turn out as I hoped at all. First off, the sketch I posted? Didn't work out. So I started a new Justin picture. And that sucks too. Justin is really hard to draw. Especially his hair. No matter how I did it, it kept making him look like Knuckles.

Anyway, here it is:

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View it and laugh.

[Youwillneverknow]

Since I like knuckles, I like the way Justin's hair turned out. his limbs are ok and the colours are neato

[Celtic Minstrel]

I'm not sure why, but the face looks rather feminine... also, aren't his shoulders kinda sharp? It looks like he's wearing padding or something.