Posted 11 May 2011 - 10:26 AM
You have a very confident line, Dan, and a good sense of color. I like the way you handled her hair too! She looks much younger in the second pic, and I think the larger head size goes a long way towards helping with that particular difficulty.
Some things to consider, possibly:
Her clavicles are riding pretty low there. Collar bones tend to dip a bit as they pull away from the shoulder, but these put the head of her sternum about halfway down her chest. This in turn adds to making her torso seem overly long, and kind of makes her bosoms seem a bit awkward, IMO.
Her neck is a little on the thin side, as well, and this is something that is exacerbated by the placement of her clavicles, because the sternomastoids have a long way to travel with those low collar bones.
Her eyes seem a bit close-set as well (although I really like the way you've drawn them!). I guess her whole face seems a little bit crowded as it is.
Lastly, a lot of artists tend to give their subjects too little of a skull when they start out drawing humans, but you seem to have pushed a little bit in the other direction, with her cranium seeming a bit over-sized. Her face adds a bit to this impression with her features so close set, as well.
All in all, this is a good picture, and you're doing a great job of changing as you spot stuff as you go. The goofy list above is just a few more things you might want to consider as you continue on your way.
I'm really looking forward to seeing your Justin pic! Thanks for sharing your stuff with us!
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